2023년 4월 10일 월요일

Narration

 JDZ, Joint development zone is the area of seabed and subsoil, together with the superjacent waters, was established as a joint development zone under Article 2 of the Treaty. And according to Oxford Dictionary, continental shelf means the area of seabed around a large landmass where the sea is relatively shallow compared with the open ocean. 

 The South Korean government claimed sovereignty over the area based on a 1969 International Court of Justice (ICJ) ruling on the principle of "natural extension of the territorial sea or land sovereignty of a coastal state" the two countries agreed to joint exploration in 1978 on a 50:50 basis. South Korea was proud to do business with Japan; at the time, South Korea did not have the technology or funds to explore and extract gas from the seabed, but the dream was dashed. Japan decided not to participate in the joint development because it saw little economic value in it. What was the real reason for Japan's decision?. It was the approaching expiration of the joint project. The agreement ends on June 22, 2028 (either side can terminate the agreement after June 2025). The problem, however, is that the 1994 amendment to the United Nations Convention on the Law of the Sea put about 90% of the joint development area under Japanese jurisdiction. In just two years, the potential offshore resources of the Dokdo could belong to Japan. 

 If South Korea were to acquire a large share of the oil and natural gas reserves in the seven fields, it would greatly reduce the country's dependence on the oil trade. It would also lower the prices of electricity, which are currently hitting the poor hard. Also, overall price is a decrease




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  1. Please change the background of your blog. It's hard to see what you wrote.

    Thesis: South Korea should continue the agreement of the Japna-Korea Joint Development Zone

    JDZ, Joint development zone is the area of seabed and subsoil, together with the superjacent waters, was established as a joint development zone
    (This describes what the place looks like. You need to explain what the Japan-Korea Joint Development is first, citing a reliable source. You need to tell them what the stipulations are of the agreement, when it was signed, for what purpose, where it is located, when it expires, etc.)

    under Article 2 of the Treaty
    (What Treaty?)

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  2. YOU NEED TO CITE ALL THE SOURCES YOU'VE USED FOR THE HISTORY, OTHERWISE YOU DO NOT GET CREDIT FOR ANYTHING YOU WRITE.

    You can begin the history by explaining what led to the agreement between Japan and Korea to establish a zone and to develop it together

    The South Korean government claimed sovereignty over the area based on a 1969 International Court of Justice (ICJ) ruling on the principle of "natural extension of the territorial sea or land sovereignty of a coastal state" the two countries agreed to joint exploration in 1978 on a 50:50 basis.
    (I don't understand what happened here. So first Korea claimed ownership of the land? But suddenly the two countries agreed to explore the area together? Did Japan claim ownership of the area? Why did the ICU get involved? You need to give the readers with all the information about your thesis because they may not understand what you're talking about.)

    South Korea was proud to do business with Japan;
    (How do you know? do you have evidence to say this? Also, why were they proud to do business with Japan?)

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  3. South Korea did not have the technology or funds to explore and extract gas from the seabed, but the dream was dashed. Japan decided not to participate in the joint development because it saw little economic value in it.
    (So Japan did not enter into agreement with Korea?)

    What was the real reason for Japan's decision?. It was the approaching expiration of the joint project.
    (Don't ask a rhetorical question. Just write this as a statement.)

    The problem, however, is that the 1994 amendment to the United Nations Convention on the Law of the Sea put about 90% of the joint development area under Japanese jurisdiction. In just two years, the potential offshore resources of the Dokdo could belong to Japan.
    (First of all, because you didn't cite your sources, this sounds like your opinion. Second, by posing this as a problem, you're speaking on the side of Korea. You need to provide the readers with unbiased objective information.)

    For the history section after you explain the background for Japan and Korea's joint agreement, you can explain what has been happening such as you did above, whether both countries fulfilled their duties and what the current stance is of each country and objectively explain how this issue is a source of controversy.

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  4. If South Korea were to acquire a large share of the oil and natural gas reserves in the seven fields, it would greatly reduce the country's dependence on the oil trade.
    (Your thesis is not about Korea acquiring share of the resources in the fields, but that Korea should continue this agreement. You don't want to make it seem like Korea should continue the agreement just so they could acquire the land and extract natural resources from it. You need to talk about how continuing/discontinuing the agreement would affect Korea's position in the world, how it could affect its economy, relations with other countries, etc.)

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